CW: You were not supposed to let go!

“Write a story or poem about a broken promise.”
– what inspired this week’s CW piece.

On our wedding night, we sat side by side,
watching the incoming tide.
“Don’t you dare ever leave me”-
I made a plea.
“I would be lost without you”-
I went on, staring at her shoe.
“That is probably true,
but stop being so blue.”-
she said, softly kissing my chest.
“Let us go get some rest!”

“Statistically, women live longer than men, anyway.”-
she said the next day, while we were walking by the bay.
“What are you talking about?”
“I will never leave you. I have no doubt.”

Statistically…

Through thick and thin
we have been.

Three years, four months and a day.

That night, we sat side by side,
watching the incoming tide.
“Please don’t leave me”-
I made a plea.
“I will be lost without you”-
I went on, staring at her shoe.
“That is probably true,
but stop being so blue.”-
she said, softly kissing my chest.
“Now, I must go. Get some rest”-

she whispered,
closing her eyes for the last time…

She made a promise she could not keep.
I could do nothing but weep.

17 thoughts on “CW: You were not supposed to let go!

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  1. The CW series has got to be your oldest blog series.

    Seems like you’ve always been a good writer, Goldie. I love poems that make me think after reading them. Oh, what I would give to be able to foresee upcoming events. Not only would that help me not make promises I won’t fulfill, but it would also help me prevent terrible events — or if I can’t prevent them, I’d make plans for what comes after the event, and if the “event” is death, I would make the most of the time I have left. I wonder if the writer and his wife regret that they didn’t make the most of the time they had before his wife’s death.

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    1. You just made me go back and check when I started writing those CW pieces. I’m glad I did, because I discovered that my 2 -year-anniversary is approaching. I announced the plans for CW on August 24th, 2017 and posted the first piece on August 28th!

      NROP is my oldest – started in May of 2017.

      Thank you for your compliment. On one hand I can definitely see how time and practice helps me grow and do better, but on the other hand, I think it just comes down to inspiration. I still write mediocre pieces. I’m very aware of that. Why? Sometimes because I really want to express something, but am not sure how.

      Sometimes I wish I could predict the future, too. But then I wouldn’t be surprised by anything. I wouldn’t really be able to enjoy “being in the moment” when something good would happen. And of course I would try to change things if I knew bad things would happen. And how would that affect me? I’m a big believer in not meddling in God’s plan. But you are right – I’d “make the most of it”. It’s just a reminder that we should, ANYWAY.

      I think they DID make the most of the time they had together. Or so was my vision.

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  2. Really good stuff. Really sad too. I think it is a lesson in life that everyone will have to go through where they realize that promises are never infallible. I’ve known someone who tossed around empty words so often that I just don’t even care what they have to say anymore hahah

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    1. I’m very particular about promises. I rarely do it, even if I really think I will commit to something. 9/10 I will do something anyway, but promising is an unbreakable bond and I don’t take it lightly. Like you – I’ve met a fair share of people who promise and don’t deliver. In this case I wanted to showcase how sometimes we say things to make others feel better. Like the famous: “It will be alright”. I was always against this phrase, but I know some people NEED to hear it and they don’t care if you believe it or not. People, huh?

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Rachael Ritchey

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From famine to feast.

Recovery and growth, things that interest me, occasional deep-thoughts, and random poetry.

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