“Write a story or poem about a broken promise.”
– what inspired this week’s CW piece.
On our wedding night, we sat side by side,
watching the incoming tide.
“Don’t you dare ever leave me”-
I made a plea.
“I would be lost without you”-
I went on, staring at her shoe.
“That is probably true,
but stop being so blue.”-
she said, softly kissing my chest.
“Let us go get some rest!”
“Statistically, women live longer than men, anyway.”-
she said the next day, while we were walking by the bay.
“What are you talking about?”
“I will never leave you. I have no doubt.”
Statistically…
Through thick and thin
we have been.
Three years, four months and a day.
That night, we sat side by side,
watching the incoming tide.
“Please don’t leave me”-
I made a plea.
“I will be lost without you”-
I went on, staring at her shoe.
“That is probably true,
but stop being so blue.”-
she said, softly kissing my chest.
“Now, I must go. Get some rest”-
she whispered,
closing her eyes for the last time…
She made a promise she could not keep.
I could do nothing but weep.
Superb! And sad. Like all the best poems, this one has a strong emotional impact. Well done Goldie!
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Oh, thank you, Stuart for this amazing compliment.
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Beautifully tragic
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Thanks, Coffee!
I have to catch up on your ramblings. With you it’s either drought or downpours every day.
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Ha, I prefer the term bukkake!
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I learn something about you every day.
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Ha, glad to be of service
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You have to remember Goldie, I am of simple mind!
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The CW series has got to be your oldest blog series.
Seems like you’ve always been a good writer, Goldie. I love poems that make me think after reading them. Oh, what I would give to be able to foresee upcoming events. Not only would that help me not make promises I won’t fulfill, but it would also help me prevent terrible events — or if I can’t prevent them, I’d make plans for what comes after the event, and if the “event” is death, I would make the most of the time I have left. I wonder if the writer and his wife regret that they didn’t make the most of the time they had before his wife’s death.
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You just made me go back and check when I started writing those CW pieces. I’m glad I did, because I discovered that my 2 -year-anniversary is approaching. I announced the plans for CW on August 24th, 2017 and posted the first piece on August 28th!
NROP is my oldest – started in May of 2017.
Thank you for your compliment. On one hand I can definitely see how time and practice helps me grow and do better, but on the other hand, I think it just comes down to inspiration. I still write mediocre pieces. I’m very aware of that. Why? Sometimes because I really want to express something, but am not sure how.
Sometimes I wish I could predict the future, too. But then I wouldn’t be surprised by anything. I wouldn’t really be able to enjoy “being in the moment” when something good would happen. And of course I would try to change things if I knew bad things would happen. And how would that affect me? I’m a big believer in not meddling in God’s plan. But you are right – I’d “make the most of it”. It’s just a reminder that we should, ANYWAY.
I think they DID make the most of the time they had together. Or so was my vision.
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Really good stuff. Really sad too. I think it is a lesson in life that everyone will have to go through where they realize that promises are never infallible. I’ve known someone who tossed around empty words so often that I just don’t even care what they have to say anymore hahah
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I’m very particular about promises. I rarely do it, even if I really think I will commit to something. 9/10 I will do something anyway, but promising is an unbreakable bond and I don’t take it lightly. Like you – I’ve met a fair share of people who promise and don’t deliver. In this case I wanted to showcase how sometimes we say things to make others feel better. Like the famous: “It will be alright”. I was always against this phrase, but I know some people NEED to hear it and they don’t care if you believe it or not. People, huh?
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Oh yes… It’s that belief that time heals all wounds. Although they don’t understand that it’s the scar in development that hurts and that sometimes we don’t want to look into the future for confort and prefer confort in real-time!
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Indeed.
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