CW: Not another fairy tale

“In 99 words, no more, no less, fracture a fairy tale.”
a prompt for this week’s CW piece.
[Source: @CarrotRanch]

 

Aside from the usual “99 words” constraint, one also had to:

  • involve a recognizable fairy tale, character or setting,
  • feature food,
  • entertain or surprise with a twist or a new point of view.

Below, you can find my entry, which got 3rd place!

Fractured Fairy Tales 3rd Place

A big thank you goes to the judges.

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The wolf was hungry and needed some action. On his way, he saw a beautiful girl in a straw house.

“Let me in, or I’ll blow your house in.”

“I don’t negotiate with terrorists” – were her last words.

Next, the wolf stumbled upon a house made of sticks.

“Let me in, or I’ll blow your house in.”

“I don’t negotiate with terrorists” – were her last words.

He salivated at the thought of bacon, looking at a piggie in a brick house.

He repeated his line.

“Not on my watch” – she shot him and used his fur as a rug.

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You can read all the entries here.

The comments my flash received from the judges:

“Like a traditional tale, this story makes a virtue of repetition but with a surprise and humorous ending. The opening line, linking hunger with action, left me unsure whether he wanted to eat the girl or have sex with her. Perhaps it was intentional, but it didn’t set the story up for me as clearly as I’d have liked.” – Anne

“This story is not as unique as the first two as the pig gets the better of the wolf but the idea of turning him into a rug was most amusing. I liked the comparison of the destructive wolf with a terrorist.” – Robbie

“What I like about this story is that it kept to the same pattern as the original story. Neither of the first two pigs was prepared, but the clever third pig was. While I don’t normally condone violence, I think this is a very fitting conclusion to the story. It took me by surprise, and I laughed. It’s good to see women standing up for themselves and against terrorism—a few good messages rolled into one short story. I think the addition of a title* would give readers advance notice of what they will read, but since a title was optional, it couldn’t lose marks for that.” – Charli
* (my submission was title-less)

What do YOU think of my not-so-fairy tale?

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P.S. As always, you are more than welcome to use this prompt to inspire your post. If you decide to write something, be sure to pingback to this post, so that I can get an alert and check out your post. (A post on how to do pingbacks can be found here.) If pingbacks are not your thing, feel free to simply leave a link to your piece in the comment section below. The more, the merrier!

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          1. Really Goldie, you actually think so?

            To be honest, there are times when I start to feel as if the Blog and the podcast are basically a circle jerk. I enjoy it, yet at the same time, I think that I turn a lot of people off. In turn, they easily tune me out.

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            1. Yes, I do. Aside from having a great voice (which is super important for audio projects), you also have an amazing network of people. They all bring something new and interesting to the table. The combination of you and them is fascinating.

              I know exactly how you feel. It’s only human. It just so happens with people, who have loud (for a lack of a better word) opinions. It seems to me that there are 3 different types of people currently. The left and the right folk, and the people in the middle. By “people in the middle” I mean those that do not care much, that want to “tune out”, because it’s annoying them, etc. And the opposition 99% of the time (currently) will never agree with you. So yes, it is difficult. HOWEVER, we should not give up!!!

              Also, remember that not everyone will appeal to everyone 100% of the time. I don’t think being “liked” by everyone is one of your main goals?!

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  1. YESSSS! Finally.
    About time *eye roll*
    Very happy to hear this. Congrats! 😀

    Jasper and I were actually discussing earlier what our favorite fairy tale is.
    The very first book I got when we came to Holland and I was learning Dutch was the Puss in Boots.
    And then when I started learning English, we got an assignment to translate a very tale. Mine was about the 3 pigs.

    Absolutely love the way you wrote this.
    The 3rd pig sure took revenge for his brothers and left a message for any future dare devil wolfs 😉

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    1. Thanks, Andrea!
      I actually was pretty surprised, because I wasn’t as proud of this piece as I was of some of the previous ones.

      That’s a pretty funny coincidence about your fairy tale discussion and your translation assignment.

      I’m glad you enjoyed my version. I just realized… I can have you translate stuff into Dutch. Hmmm…

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      1. They took their time.
        I agree with you, I think the other pieces were stronger, but that’s only because it was a more sensitive topic.

        You can make a whole international short story book with many languages since WP is an international society!

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  2. I loved it! The terrorist analogy was inspired and I love how you turned it round at the end. I’d like to see you do more stories like this, using fairy tales to explain current affairs. I find it fascinating looking into the origins of so many of nursery rhymes that were a play on the events of the day. It would be fun to do a current version

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