CW: Not another fairy tale

“In 99 words, no more, no less, fracture a fairy tale.”
– a prompt for this week’s CW piece.
[Source: @CarrotRanch]

 

Aside from the usual “99 words” constraint, one also had to:

• involve a recognizable fairy tale, character or setting,
• feature food,
• entertain or surprise with a twist or a new point of view.

Below, you can find my entry, which got 3rd place!

A big thank you goes to the judges.

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The wolf was hungry and needed some action. On his way, he saw a beautiful girl in a straw house.

“Let me in, or I’ll blow your house in.”

“I don’t negotiate with terrorists” – were her last words.

Next, the wolf stumbled upon a house made of sticks.

“Let me in, or I’ll blow your house in.”

“I don’t negotiate with terrorists” – were her last words.

He salivated at the thought of bacon, looking at a piggie in a brick house.

He repeated his line.

“Not on my watch” – she shot him and used his fur as a rug.

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You can read all the entries here.

The comments my flash received from the judges:

“Like a traditional tale, this story makes a virtue of repetition but with a surprise and humorous ending. The opening line, linking hunger with action, left me unsure whether he wanted to eat the girl or have sex with her. Perhaps it was intentional, but it didn’t set the story up for me as clearly as I’d have liked.” – Anne

“This story is not as unique as the first two as the pig gets the better of the wolf but the idea of turning him into a rug was most amusing. I liked the comparison of the destructive wolf with a terrorist.” – Robbie

“What I like about this story is that it kept to the same pattern as the original story. Neither of the first two pigs was prepared, but the clever third pig was. While I don’t normally condone violence, I think this is a very fitting conclusion to the story. It took me by surprise, and I laughed. It’s good to see women standing up for themselves and against terrorism—a few good messages rolled into one short story. I think the addition of a title* would give readers advance notice of what they will read, but since a title was optional, it couldn’t lose marks for that.” – Charli
* (my submission was title-less)

What do YOU think of my not-so-fairy tale?

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Stay golden,

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